Comments on: Anzac Day

By: Latonya Keith

Latonya Keith — Thu, 13 Nov 2008 00:01:19 +0000

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By: Plops

Plops — Sat, 07 Jun 2008 23:43:09 +0000

You are a writin’ tease.

Write here or talk to me about my writing.

Ellen is almost done.

- Plops.

By: Plops

Plops — Wed, 07 May 2008 23:59:49 +0000

This is a decent piece. In general, your writing in maturing. You are getting better at thematic writing (the reference to the importance of living, especially during war time) and, more specifically, you are messing around with your writing style:

“gastro-kids”

I would love to see you doing more of this. Every time you feel like using a cliche creeping into your story, rewrite it in a way that no one has ever seen.

“…and once its branch has been snipped it tumbles down towards certain doom before settling perfectly on the thorny crook of neighbouring branches. I take this as a sign, pick it up and head out.”

Very good use of words and images. I feel these words.

I always loved you ability to be honest, something I have a terrible time doing myself. Keep being honest and keep using your own words.

– Plops.

By: muppet23

muppet23 — Thu, 01 May 2008 02:54:05 +0000

Three things:

I personally appreciate this story in relation to my father who served in Vietnam. He has never communicated details other than to describe how he felt regarding his return; he could not. Not for some time anyway. His family proud, wishing to show him off, shake his hand and slap him on the back — these were not the things he felt his actions warranted. Barely home a month, he then fled to Mexico to live for five years. That was his attempt to forget.

I adore the ‘native’ language you’ve adopted into your writing.

Your ability to paint a picture, to take me where you are, physically and emotionally, is beautiful.

Thanks.

By: Marzipan

Marzipan — Wed, 30 Apr 2008 11:47:03 +0000

Hear, hear.

By: Jen

Jen — Tue, 29 Apr 2008 00:30:29 +0000

Er, make that “organization” – I maintain that I was typing so fast, some of my letters were eaten. Enjoy.

By: Jen

Jen — Tue, 29 Apr 2008 00:29:02 +0000

I think it’s really important for our young ones to learn and appreciate the elder generations, most of whom, yes, have served their country. In America, so many young people dismiss the elderly – hell, middle-aged people dismiss them, too. But some people still value the input of those who came before them – we have an orgination out here in L.A. called The ONE Generation. It’s a place for seniors to live or visit, and there is also daycare for children. The children have activities with the seniors (art classes, etc.) every week. It’s wonderful and it’s important. I highly recommend something like that for everyone’s kids. (And their elderly relatives, for that matter – the old folks get such a charge out of the kids!)

By: Nightmare

Nightmare — Sat, 26 Apr 2008 00:38:47 +0000

Beautiul…simply beautiful.

By: Incredipete

Incredipete — Tue, 22 Apr 2008 16:18:20 +0000

Well said, Mr. Hole. Amen.

By: warcrygirl

warcrygirl — Tue, 22 Apr 2008 12:44:40 +0000

Wow, what a somber holiday. It amazes me how we’re able to teach something like this to kids without giving them nightmares. Between reading about this and watching “My Boy Jack” on PBS Sunday night I feel shell-shocked. I also feel pride whenever I see my kids (in full Scout uniform) marching in our local Veteran’s Day Parade. I guess kids are tougher than we realize.